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Good=Descriptive language Like=The onomatopoeia Target=Dirty muddy floor doesn't make sense WELL DONE YOU DID VERY WELL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
— HOWLER MONKEY + RABBIT
good extract portrigal. *your sentence starter were great
— polar bear and wolf
Hello Portugal I am David. I really enjoyed your story it is intense and has good words. *Firstly what I think could be changed is: "I through my self." I think it should be "threw" *Next you to think about using more full-stops and capital letters in the correct place (or maybe a comma or two?) Thanks David Walliams
— David walliams