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Your adjectives make your story more interesting and they make us picture the script in our heads. Your similes don't make sense like the one about the toilet and the one about the chair because he cant be smaller than his hands. Over all we really liked this .
— Koala and Tiger
To Norway, Your adjectives make your story more interesting and we really enjoyed it... but it didn't sound really big. From Labrador and Camemn
— Labrador and Camen
Hello Norway, I like your story but it says: 'As I rose up , saw a monstrous giant... 'I think there should be an I. And it says 'his legs were the size of a 2 meters' but apart from that it is very good! Well done
— Little T