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Hey Kenya, we think your writing is great especially all your description. Here are a few things to work on, :your simile as big as a tree. You didn't tell us how big the tree was. :We felt like you were missing out parts. If your wondering who is writing it is unicorn because unicorns are smart and Neanderthals are not.
— Unicorn & Neanderthal
hello Kenya you writing is exceptionally good I thought the description is great but I have a few things for you to work on, 1) try and make you sentences longer I thought that you could've extended them a little. 2) when you said he was an elephant with his herd I didn't really understand what you meant so maybe you could've explained it a little more. from the BFG (big friendly giant)
— bfg