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I liked how you described the iron man and how he moves. I wish you could add some commas.
— PUG!! & SNOWSHOO!!!!
Dear Jamaica I really liked your story it was very descriptive. I loved the way you described the Iron Man's head as a dustbin the size of the moon. I also liked the way you described his arms, that they were to heavy for his body. But maby you could finish your sentence before you write another one for example: as I sat down to eat my sandwich in the large grassy, I saw a........ when you writ grassy you didn't finish the sentence.
— david attenbrough