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We really liked Your description and the suspense you used but we did not understand "why I was eating my ice cream " but other than that we really enjoyed it.
— gerbil and panther
Well done Greece, i have a question for you, are you greasy? Any way, well done i really liked your descriptive words and onomatopoeia's but the story is a bit jumbled up and i don't understand why he was eating ice-cream. But all in all it was a good story!!! Maggie
— Maggie Simpson